Thursday, March 16, 2006

Neeeeeeeeed Help


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I need some help with the timing of these shots. And do you think the neck movement is over the top? Do you think Chloe should look under the table instead of way from the tea cup

4 Comments:

Blogger Unknown said...

please hide controls when you playblast. very distracting.

6:15 AM  
Blogger David Suroviec said...

oh come on joe i would think by now you would be able to see through the controls.

6:41 AM  
Blogger Unknown said...

ok, i think one thing to think about is what the shot is about. you've got too much business going on for the shot, in my opinion. you've got the girl looking around, uninterested with the bird for some strange reason, then the bird spitting up the cup, which we nearly miss because our attention is split between where the girl is looking and what the bird might be doing, then the bird puts its foot up on the table, but our focus is not so much on the bird as on its foot because the head goes off screen, thus making it unclear what the bird's intentions are and still feeling strange that the girl knows the bird wants to eat the fish. i'd split this scene up into two or more shots--each shot telling the audience one main idea. i'm going to thumbnail a few ideas and get back to you in a few minutes.

7:06 AM  
Blogger Unknown said...

ok, so here's one way i'd suggest. also, with ms featherbottom, i'd direct our focus by using her long neck and beak as an arrow that points toward what we should be looking at.

http://clips1.vimeo.com/video_files/2006/03/17/vimeo.75037.70fe5e.m4v

oh, and here's a suggestion of a different staging for the beginning of the sequence:

http://clips1.vimeo.com/video_files/2006/03/17/vimeo.75038.aa179e.m4v

7:29 AM  

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